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> AHTUNG PEOPLE! Story from my manga.=__=, saneemos beidzot!~_~
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post Aug 20 2005, 02:32
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tax, es patlaben taisu mangu, un taas story varu jums paraadiit.


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Bija sutīgs piektdienas vakars, Toiči sēdēja parkā nolūkodamies ka viņa mazā māsa Sun-Janga baro putnus. Bija pagājusi kārtējā nogurdinošā darba nedēļa.
''Šī pasaule ir šausmīga.''viņš nodomāja. Toičī nekad nav juties laimīgs, ja nu vienīgi tad kad viņa mamma bija dzīva. kad Toiči bija 6 gadi, viņa mamma nomira no vēža.Toiči ar savu mazo māsu pārvācās pie vecvecākiem, bet pirms pāris gadiem viņu vecvecāki nomira un viņi pārcēlās uz lielpilsētu. Patlaben īrē mazu dzīvoklīti virs suši restorāna.(ar norunu ka Toiči tur strādās)Dzīve ir diežgan pagrūta ja jāstrādā pa izsūtāmo, jāstudē un tev uzmācās tīna. Tīna ir izlepusi topmodelīte kas iemīlējusies Toiči.
''Sun-Janga! Mums jāiet, drīz būs tumšs.''Iesaucās toiči.
''labi, labi...''atsauca mazā māsa.
Atgriezies mājās, toiči uzreiz ielikās gūltā, pats sev nemanot aizmiga.
Viņš lidoja...bija tik patīkami.., pēkšņi viņš pamodās pludmalē. pie viņa stāvēja skaista meitene ar brūniem matiem un skaistām, lielām zilām, acīm.
''Sveiks, toiči.''viņa sacīja ''tātad tu tomēr ieradies!''
es biju nesaprašanā.kas ir šī skaistā būtne? un ko sasodīts es te daru??
''Tava māte.''pēkšņi ieminējās skaistā būtne. ''ko? kas ir ar viņu? kas te notiek? kas tu esi?''
''mani sauc Hitana'. Tava māte man pa tevi daudz stāstijusi. es gaidīju mirkli kad tu te ieradīsies!''viņa sacīja. ''Ko? atvaino es neko nesapratu. mana mate, t.....''
Un tad pēkšni Hiana noskūpstīja toiči. Skūpsts bija patīkams, maigs, auksts..
BAMS! Toiči atkal pamodās savā gūltā. ''UUH! tas tik bija sapnītis!''
pēkšņi kautkas zem segas saknosījās.''Kas?..''iesaucās toiči. no sagas apakšas izlīda Hitana(ohlalaa! kaila!) ''?????????'''mēmi iesaucās toiči.
''TOIČĪ, TU DARBU NOKAVĒSI!'' pēkšņi pa durvīm ieskrēja viņa māsa.
kādu briidi viens uz otru skatījās.
WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA TOIČIIIIIIII!''
TURPINAAJUS SEKOS.
žandrs-romance, komedy,eicchi, un nesen izdomaaju ka-arii draama.(little)
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post Aug 20 2005, 18:03
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Paaraak iis lai ko sprieztu.
Vai tev neliekas, ka pasule ir redzeejusi pietiekami daudzus simtus shaadu mangu???? Bet raksti veel, kaa jau teicu veel neko nevar spriezt!!!! Pagaidaam viss ir, kaa visaas standarta '' dzeks un '' kaudze skukju ''!!!!!!!
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post Aug 21 2005, 18:52
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Norādīšu uz pāris kļūdām:
  • diežgan (6. rindiņa);
  • trūkst komatu (tajā pašā 6. rindiņā un arī citur);
  • bet tur, kur ir tiešā runa, kļūdu ir briesmīgi daudz.
P.S. Ja vajag, varu mēģināt salikt trūkstošos komatus, taču pats neesmu nekāds izcilais latviešu valodā.
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post Aug 21 2005, 22:17
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diivains vaards "Sun-Janga"... neizklausaas peec japaanju meitenes vaarda... driizaak peec kjiinieshu puisha smile.gif


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post Aug 23 2005, 00:35
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QUOTE(Ichno-sama @ Aug 20 2005, 02:32)
WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA TOIČIIIIIIII!''
TURPINAAJUS SEKOS.
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post Aug 23 2005, 09:28
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QUOTE(lastguru @ Aug 21 2005, 22:17)
diivains vaards "Sun-Janga"... neizklausaas peec japaanju meitenes vaarda... driizaak peec kjiinieshu puisha smile.gif
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post Aug 23 2005, 09:42
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http://www.google.com/search?client=opera&rls=en&q=Sun-Janga


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post Aug 24 2005, 22:00
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Manu viedokli tu jau zini! wink.gif


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post Aug 24 2005, 22:35
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QUOTE(Kikumi @ Aug 24 2005, 23:00)
Manu viedokli tu jau zini! wink.gif
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of course! cool.gif
emm, man skiet ka es mainiishu chariem vaardus(iznemot Hitana un Toiči)
emmm, tagad negribaas rakstiit chapter2, soo gribu dzirdeet vel komentaarus.


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post Aug 24 2005, 23:58
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Toichi māsu tu varētu nosaukt par Yoshimi! Nezinu kāpēc, bet šis vārds man ļoti patīk! Un Tīnu tu varētu nosaukt par Mariko! Šis vārds man atkal asociējas ar nepiedienīgām sievietēm! laugh.gif


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post Aug 25 2005, 00:06
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QUOTE(Kikumi @ Aug 25 2005, 00:58)
Toichi māsu tu varētu nosaukt par Yoshimi! Nezinu kāpēc, bet šis vārds man ļoti patīk! Un Tīnu tu varētu nosaukt par Mariko! Šis vārds man atkal asociējas ar nepiedienīgām sievietēm! laugh.gif
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izcili! man vaig kaadu kas man paliidzeetu domaat chariem vardus. jo personiigi es, vaardus neprotu domaat. laugh.gif Jaa kikumi, tavi vaardi der! cool.gif


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post Aug 25 2005, 00:08
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Vispār ir arī vēl kāds čars tavā stāstā? huh.gif


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post Aug 25 2005, 00:13
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QUOTE(Kikumi @ Aug 25 2005, 01:08)
Vispār ir arī vēl kāds čars tavā stāstā? huh.gif
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protams! domaa tur dazi cilveecini tikei apgrozaas? happy.gif
vini ir daudz bet pa tiem es citu reizi uzraxtiisu(kautkaa naw gariigaa lai raxtiitu garus textus!)


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post Sep 16 2005, 22:11
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